[IELTS] Dependence on other people

IELTS Writing Task 2

(Question)

Some people think that we are becoming independent of each other while other people say that we are becoming more dependent on each other. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Planning

People are being independent

1. Individualism spreads out these days.
2. Pursuing their own life. Privacy.
3. Do not want to get disturbed. Various entertaining things are springing out than in the past.

People are being dependent

1. A Lot of hazardous situations arise. When people are Out of home.
2. Feelings of Relaxation, safety can be achieved if ones count on others.

It is said that some people are of the opinion that without relying on others is a growing trend, whereas others think that the number of people who are counting on each other is increasing. Those views have significant reasons, and I steadfastly believe the former opinion.

To begin with, high dependence on other people can be expected for some reasons. Firstly, it is primarily caused by a lot of hazardous situations which arise in the modern society. Even if it is said that there are numerous laws and equipment to cope with unexpected situations, when people are out of home, there is a high possibility of being taken accidents such as car accidents, firing guns at random and the like. Moreover, willingness to feel relaxation and safety is another reason for people to be fond of being dependent. I assume that this phenomenon is owing to the nature of human that is related to being protective from the strange environment.

On the other hand, I think that it is obvious that there are several reasons why people are gradually more independent than in the past. First and foremost, the gradual tendency of individualism spreads out these days. For example, in Korea before the influx of the western culture, it was a common behavior that neighbors help each other, which is called ‘Jung’, however, as the country is becoming industrialized and globalized, Koreans tend to simply care about themselves. In addition, people who are eager to protect their own privacy prefer not to get disturbed, and some of them would like to enjoy various entertainments in their private space.

In conclusion, although it can be seen that there are several dangerous incidents that occur nowadays, I believe that individualism and the importance of privacy caused people to be independent.