[IELTS] Purpose of working hard

IELTS Writing Task 2

(Question)

Some people think that the only purpose of working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

planning:

agree or disagree :

agree : 1. financial reward can be useful in people’s livelihood -  capitalism

           2. able to have more opportunities that money plays an important role in - education, better career, money for surgery, investment

disagree:

(Introduction)

It is believed that earning a lot of money is a motivation for people to work hard. I agree with this idea.

(Body 1)

To begin with, it is obvious that financial reward is useful in maintaining people’s livelihood. This is because most of the global societies consist of capitalism, which result in obsession with money. In fact, it is needless to say that there is no possibility in that people can live without spending some amount of money in daily life. For instance, aside from the homeless, it is inevitable that cost of maintenance will be charged after using services that are essential for people’s lives such as electricity, water, internet bill, and the like. To take another example, paying taxes is mandatory to people in order for the governments to sustain as a result people need money.

(Body 2)

Moreover, I believe that people are able to have more opportunities whenever they have money. Due to the inability of affording advanced education, there is a tendency that the implication of widening income gap can be seen in the society. For example, pursuing Masters degree in Business Analysis will cost tons of money, but once people succeed in it, their salaries will be guaranteed to be doubled or tripled. Furthermore, sizeable wealth should be needed in case of medical surgery or investing to promising assets like real estate. As long as people are affluent with money, it is no bad thing to be prepared well for the unexpected situations. (As long as people are financially-secured, there is no worry about some unexpected situations that they might encounter. )

(Conclusion)

In conclusion, I firmly agree that wealth is one of the most essential components for making a living and that provides numerous chances to attain a convenient life.